tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1362779098057429246.post2590684763496119264..comments2023-03-28T02:52:37.926-07:00Comments on Every Word is One Step Closer: Wings of DeathBow Psyduckhttp://www.blogger.com/profile/05465782807112569063noreply@blogger.comBlogger9125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1362779098057429246.post-81600478487155807512012-06-28T17:59:30.994-07:002012-06-28T17:59:30.994-07:00Thanks for your comment! I know, once I had some o...Thanks for your comment! I know, once I had some of my teeth taken out of my mouth, and I had to breath in a drug that made me fall asleep. It can't even remember much about that day, since I was so drowsy!Bow Psyduckhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/05465782807112569063noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1362779098057429246.post-42458595703753262132012-06-27T20:53:02.151-07:002012-06-27T20:53:02.151-07:00Interesting. The last time I saw someone inject a ...Interesting. The last time I saw someone inject a milky white substance into me, I instantly fell asleep before everything got inside. Great pre-procedure drug.<br /><br /><br />http://joycelansky.blogspot.comCatch My Wordshttps://www.blogger.com/profile/06338761214938263819noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1362779098057429246.post-4887457648013810892012-06-26T13:37:28.812-07:002012-06-26T13:37:28.812-07:00Ms. Tyler, I really appreciate your comment, and I...Ms. Tyler, I really appreciate your comment, and I'll make sure to apply your advice to another writing piece in the future (if I write about death, that is)! Thanks a lot for everything! I'm glad you like my story. :)Bow Psyduckhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/05465782807112569063noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1362779098057429246.post-55241913447012035852012-06-26T06:18:53.389-07:002012-06-26T06:18:53.389-07:00Certainly a hard moment to write about, the moment...Certainly a hard moment to write about, the moment of death! I love the metaphor of the fish at the end. And I especially like the flashbacks; there is that saying that our whole life flashes before our eyes at the moment of death, and you do that well here. I especially like the scene of with the question of why is snow white. (I didn't understand the other flashback as well). Actually adding more flashbacks would help to establish character here, and thus make the actual death moment all the more poignant. This was a hard challenge! And you took a great leap of the imagination. What fiction writing is all about.Sandra Tylerhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/13191775335774130719noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1362779098057429246.post-34028901763997557372012-06-25T14:15:51.868-07:002012-06-25T14:15:51.868-07:00Thank you for your comment! I know, this was for a...Thank you for your comment! I know, this was for an assignment, so it's more like a few scenes put together, and you won't really understand it until you have read the book, Fahrenheit 451. Thanks anyway. :)Bow Psyduckhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/05465782807112569063noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1362779098057429246.post-56380850858590101432012-06-25T14:13:21.393-07:002012-06-25T14:13:21.393-07:00Thank you so much, Kathy! I'm really glad that...Thank you so much, Kathy! I'm really glad that you found my story interesting. :)Bow Psyduckhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/05465782807112569063noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1362779098057429246.post-52729498038472822062012-06-25T09:14:56.997-07:002012-06-25T09:14:56.997-07:00This is beautifully written and I was completely e...This is beautifully written and I was completely entranced with every word. It drew me in and captivated me. Well done!!<br /><br />Kathy<br />http://gigglingtruckerswife.blogspot.comAnonymoushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/11564863484894692249noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1362779098057429246.post-33304041642819650192012-06-25T04:21:26.066-07:002012-06-25T04:21:26.066-07:00Hmm, I'm not sure how I feel about this piece....Hmm, I'm not sure how I feel about this piece. It's beautifully written, no doubt, and kudos to you for that, but there is something missing, on a personal level for me. I can't find the soul of the story, but as I said, that is me, and no reflection on your writing ability.Mojo Writinhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/09457472397010589516noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1362779098057429246.post-67746058772023622092012-06-23T21:47:14.533-07:002012-06-23T21:47:14.533-07:00Beautifully written! Mommy really loves this piece...Beautifully written! Mommy really loves this piece of your writing!Journey of Lifehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/14814279353807130008noreply@blogger.com